On Polluted Water
Fish cannot survive on polluted water,
Despite how wide the water spreads,
They cannot breathe, which does matter,
In space mixed with poisonous seaweeds.
.
The drive to live need not to pretend,
Troubled waters need to be cleaned,
Fish cannot survive on polluted water,
Despite how wide the water spreads.
.
No longer can we nearly live with no error,
Uncertainty leads to hollow grace,
I saw it in the mirror,
I saw it in my face.
Fish cannot survive on polluted water.
One Single Impression (hollow)
Sunday Scribbling (nearly)
Cloaked Monk (Uncertainty)
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[...] Jingle [...]
No, I could not, so I became man but man can not survive on polluted water,
Despite how wide the molecules are spread;-)
LOL – I almost spit my coffee.
A major league baseball weighs about 5.25 ounces. A uranium baseball would weigh over 8.5 pounds! Cha Cha Answers.. So it can’t spread that far I would think. BTW why is there a “w” in answer? smiles…
Intriguing + 7 prompts met = success!
I like it, very nice!
Survive on green eggs and ham, I can,
but polluted water, no thanks, man,
The water might be wide, I think it’s deep,
But it’s supposed to be clean forever to keep,
Polluted water, I say “No, Thank you!”
Water that’s polluted will never do,
The water might be wide, it might be deep,
But it might put me forever and ever to sleep.
I don’t think we could live on polluted water either! And that is what is happening to our water sources in so many parts of the world today. Sad ; (
Poor fishies. : (
Educational and a lovely rhythm
Not fish nor people.
Ji, I just love how you manage to fulfill the guidelines for several challenges at the same time. Quite wonderful.
We have such small voices. Where will the multinationals, the polluters and those others that don’t care a damn be when there is nothing left to exploit? Who will say STOP this is our planet, can’t you see what is coming? Disaster is coming soon to a neighborhood near you!
Good reminder not to dump in water!
It’s a slow death for everyone… Gonna clean up the mind which spreads pollutants everywhere
so true, so true.
fish are wonderful beings are they not?
Many things are contaminated by pollution in every area of life. So sad.
Well put!
Hugs Giggles
So sad and so very true…well written Jingle
Oh my goodness. I just commented pretty much exactly the same comment. How funny!
funny indeed.
Very sad and very true. Great write, thank you.
Great use of repetion – really made this piece flow perfectly..Jae
Great….an important thing captured within poetry
Loved it.
or repetition even..my spelling muscle hasn’t quite woken up today!
these are very very wise and beautiful thoughts jingle. i loved the poem and loved it as a rondel.
We have to say it again and again… And thanks for saying it in such nice way!
Good one, Jingle. Thanks for sharing your blues.
Happy Blue Monday.
Nice post, and neat play on “nearly.” My favorite line: “Uncertainty leads to hollow grace ” – wow.
That’s so cute!
Helpless fish.. if only there was more care..
Oh yes, dear, TT is up for this week so if you have the time, do hope to see you too..
Very piscatorial!
what a great idea for a blog. I’m no poet, but I like people who think like poets.
Keri
Some good lines, Jingle but a Rondel must follow a specific rhyme pattern, and has 13 lines.
This is from the Shadow Poetry page: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
Rondel
A French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.
Thanks for the instructions..
my first time trying..
That’s interesting Jingle…
I’ll have to now seriously think
about poetry to try and enhance
my expressions
thank’s for providing such an
informative space…. Spider..!
An important topic, presented so well. Thank you, Jingle!
True…
Ji, thanks for the reminder. We need to remember the pollution not only of our environment but also of our souls.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/03/28/the-journey/
Hi,
Thanks for the comment!
Rondels can be 13 or 14 lines and what is important is the rhyming structure and the syllables..and most important is the repetition .Your rondel is good …you can still have a check on the rhyming structure too.Overall, the poem has a nice message !
Thanks for the encouragement,,
You’ve combined so many memes. I’m impressed! Also, your poem is a social commentary on pollution, protecting our enivornment, and those precious fish. Nicely done.
I think we all should be concerned about this-but we aren’t. Thanks for bringing it to our attention!
We better start cleaning up if we need to protect those lovely ones ..
Good post !
Such a creative use of prompts to make a much needed statement. Thanks for posting!
Even though I’m now very sad for the fish, I’m happy you wrote this for them.
Ahhh Yes! Well put!
Well written!
great message in this Jingle beautiful writing!
That was lovely Jingle. How do you manage to do it every time? Use so many topics/themes in one poem?
We are learning about ways to keep our water supplies clean and save water too. We all need clean water to stay healthy…At Stevenson Elementary we are testing a sample of water for dissolved oxygen.
Great write on water pollution! Simple and straightforward but the repetition of the 2 liners gave emphasis on the key point – we should NOT be polluting the waters!
“Uncertainty leads to hollow grace,”- wonderful line! And I love how you combined all the prompts- excellent job!!!
Nice one, wish humanity could pause and think about it. Not only for the fish’ sake, but ours as well.
Educative and inspiring….
very nice.
Enjoyed your poem in form and thought. Well done with a message that can not be repeated too often!
Well, hello Jingle Jangle. How have you been? Thanks for stopping by!
There is something fishy about polluted water…
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amen to that… I adore “one fish / two fish” your poem would make the doc proud!
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